what do you think of my poetry honest answers needed
In life all most people want , is to have happiness their health and finacial security,
but most of us get it wrong, when all we had looked for was wealth. M oney can bring you joy, of course it can! but be sure that along with joy comes sadness, followed by pain ,loss and regret.
You see people with money can sometimes forget,
that it is not money that is evil but the people who hold it. so decide in your own time and space whats more important in life and to our exsistance, the love of money or the love we have for eachother,
Love thy friend as thy brother , make no mistakes , so theres no confusion , show people you love them , don’t show an illussion.
In spiritualism mishaps are made , but god will always love us , theres no need to be afraid.
So hold your hands on your hearts and show love in the future,
because all we need is peace and understanding ,
for to our kids , we are the tutor.
Marie K , to be honest w/ U , I don’t see it poetry.It’s prose.U ‘v tackled a topic which seems to be an answer to a lasting question, which is better money or (some thing else) happiness, health etc.
I see that U made a good effort to give an honest answer, in which Ur opinion was loud and clear.The spiritual part,
“but God always loves us there is no need to be afraid”
was a beautifully brought in to conclude Ur argument, for Ur humane opinion needed a spiritual backup.The 3 last lines drew the moral of Ur argument, and showed Ur concern of future generations,and remind the adults ( especially parents) of their obligations, and what they should do (behave), for they R the idol of their kids
Why it is not poetry? because U haven’t used poetry devices, or followed a poetic form.Its a good prose though, I like it.Keep on writing and good luck.
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